Bodhirose has set today’s prompt for d’Verse Poets Pub

Our challenge for today is to use the following fourteen words in the order presentedstay, sits, play, wits, fits, comedy, flits, tragedy, eye, smart, cry, heart, moan, stone.  These words were borrowed from a sonnet by Edmund Spenser.
So we will be writing a fourteen line poem with each of these words being our end line rhymes and they must be used in the order presented.  You may choose to write a sonnet using iambic pentameter if you wish (as was traditional) but it isn’t necessary.

If you were I would you ask me to stay?
Considering the way consorting sits
with you. Your inability to play
a simple game of chess. Where are your wits?

I’ve heard them call you numbskull – well it fits.
In fact you could be labelled comedy
on legs. Your concentration dives and flits
from here to there. It’s such a tragedy.

And please don’t try that melancholy eye.
You ought to know by now I’m much too smart
to fall for your pathetic ‘love me’ cry.
It’s not that I am mean and have no heart,

but don’t you know, you silly dog, I’ll moan
when mud’s awash the best Venetian stone.

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19 responses to “Talking To Tim”

  1. Marvelous use of the words, Shirley, well done! Those last two lines made me smile.

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  2. I agree, this is so well done 😀 touche

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  3. Love it – the last two lines made me smile too.
    Anna :o]

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  4. love the idea of moaning to a statue – clever use of this form

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  5. I am really impressed with this one! Truly I wouldn’t know that you had written to the form…as it makes SUCH perfect sense!

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  6. Fun twist in your closing, Shirley! The stone won’t mind – moan on! 😉

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  7. Very clever & well crafted, incorporating the chosen words in comfortable & witty narrative.

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  8. Well that ending line was unexpected ~ Enjoyed your twist to the story Shirley ~

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    Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade)

    Very cleverly done.

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  10. Enjoy the “snarkiness” of this–my favorite line has to be:
    I’ve heard them call you numbskull – well it fits

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  11. Well, there seems to be a bit of bitterness between the lines.

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    1. Yes, I wondered that. My original idea was that N was talking to a dog.

      But don’t you know, you silly dog, I’ll moan
      with mud awash the best Venetian stone.

      Perhaps I should have stuck!

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  12. Such a wonderful relationship you show.. Sometimes people’s way of acting up can make you angry…

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  13. Okay, now I want to know what those two lines were that everyone loved but you changed! I love the poem, but curiosity is going to drive me crazy. I guess that’s what I get for coming late to the party. 😉

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  14. Clever! You’ve risen well above the form….don’t even notice it in the sense this makes. Smiling I am!

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  15. What a clever title! I love to do this when I write: take a common phrase and twist it into something new.

    I love your poem. I think you brought something fresh to every required end-word. Great rhythm throughout, as well.

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    1. Thank you, RH. Sorry, must have missed this at the time.

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  16. Scrabble or chess..
    games not conducive
    to ADHD way..
    turn on the TV..
    Radio.. dance
    and read..
    and then
    perhaps
    i can
    participate..;)

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